2009上海中考英语作文

帮我修改一下 I want to plant some trees for my school.Because I hope my school become a green school. First,I will tell my friends what I want to do.And let them agree with me.Second, I will plant some trees on campus with my friends.At last,I will take care of the trees also with my friends.In addition,I will tell the students to protect the trees.I think my school will be very beautiful.

Because I hope my school become a green语法错误，要说成Because I hope my school to become.First改成first of all，Second改成further more At last改成Last but not the least.这样改了之后语言更加丰富the trees 最好把the去掉，不要去强调它。最后那个very 改成more。别的好像还好。

应试的英语作文要分段干嘛…… 应该是不空的，反正初中英语作文没有换行要空行空格的说法，实在不行就扩点字，一行里后面省点空格让老师知道你是在这里换行了，比如说你拟稿的时候用want to do发现正好满一行，但又想让批卷老师知道你在这里换行另起一段的话就用would like to do就好了，道理是一样的，在保证正确率的情况下能用从句更好 另外英语作文也不用写很多，多了可能有错误，语法错误在规定的时间内自己检查不一定检查出来